Micah,
I do like the style of the ad, but find it just a wee bit too aggressive in parts. It's almost like you're trying to dictate terms to the applicants - Hey, it's my way or the highway!! LOL!
You might want to tone it down a bit. Just my opinion. Not sure how things work in your part of the world, but over here, some of it might be considered "rude".
Cheers - JJ
